This was fairly good right up until the end when it wasn't. The hero was arrogant and controlling for no real reason. You knew he had loved her for a long time and had jumped at the chance to force her into marriage supposedly to satisfy her dying mother. Yet at the end there was no climatic event (fiction writing 101) and he never came right out and said he loved her. He just said "you are my love." I don't consider that adequate after all the bullying he did. There needed to be some discussion about why he rejected her 5 years ago. We are led to assume that he thought she was too young. I don't like to assume. I want to read it. There were other unsatisfying parts for example, there was a place where he says that if anyone hurts her they will have to answer to him yet when she admits that an ex lover of his has been saying hurtful things and intimating that she and the hero had slept together the day before, he gets mad at the heroine for believing her. That just makes him a dick in my opinion.

Although this story had some great bones and I typically love an infatuated hero who maneuvers the heroine into marriage, here the follow through didn't quite cut it.

Ultimately rather disappointing. ( )