Moon is the first book in the ‘Captive Alphas’ series. It stars Moon, an alpha, and Kaydi, an omega. This story is told in first person from both Moon and Kaydi’s pov.



First I’ll start my review with the cover. I like it. The colors are attractive and the cover model could pass for Moon.

I didn’t hate this story, but there are a lot of things about it I didn’t like, but by the other reviews it’s clear what I don’t like, it doesn’t bother other readers. The writing style was not one I liked, and I’ll list the reasons why below. I don’t know if this is the author’s usual style because this is the first story I’ve read by this author.

The blurb does a good job of explaining the plot of the book so I won’t go into it again. The book starts with Moon’s pov. For many pages he gives an info-dump of the past history of their society and why he’s locked up in a cage to be a forced sperm donor. One of many things I dislike about certain writing styles are info-dumps. They tend to go on for too long and are monotonous. In this case my mind wandered as soon as I started reading.

There’s a lot of monologue in this book and I mean a lot. Probably seventy-five to eighty percent of the book is monologue and the rest dialogue. If you read my reviews, you’ll know that I don’t like books that rely on monologue because it’s almost always boring, it doesn’t lend to empathizing with the characters, and it comes across as non-stop talking especially if it’s paired with first person pov. And for me, that’s what happened. The characters told readers about their situations, about their environment, about their thoughts and about their feelings. The way the characters conveyed all of this kept me distant from them and I couldn’t identify or feel for them even though I could tell that I was supposed to with what they were going through. I wanted to feel and I wasn’t. I wasn’t drawn in.

I liked the characters but I wish we learned more about Kaydi and Moon, aka Aki. Their background was superficial with most info on how they were to adjust to each other during their confinement and become mates. As to their personalities, Kaydi expected a certain omega life, but that was derailed with the new beta experiment. Kaydi grew from a hesitant, unsure omega to a strong adversary the betas needed to watch out for. Moon was raised in a sort of solitary confinement for about the past seven years. In a way his spirit was broken, so he didn’t accept Kaydi at first. But Moon’s protective instincts kicked in. What I wanted to see were all the changes in Moon, but what we got instead was Kaydi telling readers how Moon had changed. That’s why I couldn’t feel for them as much as I wanted. There were lengthy sex scenes for Kaydi’s heat and detailed sex scenes when Moon was in the fleecing room.

I have some questions about the biological part of the ‘humans’ in this world. Alphas are the sperm donors; they are always male. Omegas have the wombs and give birth; they are always male. Betas are sterile and are either male or female. I want to know why there are females in this world? They are irrelevant. They serve no purpose. Only the males serve a purpose by being Alpha, or omega, the most valued of the species, and some are the Betas. If only omegas give birth, then females aren’t needed. Why did this species have females? Why did the author feel it necessary to include females that didn’t produce? Did females somewhere in the ancient past give birth and then become sterile? Because if that’s not the case, then nature would have no reason to produce a sex that didn’t produce. Also, if male children were the valued ones because only they could become Alphas or omegas, and Betas tested as mentioned in the story, to find the sex of each fetus before birth, then why didn’t Betas terminate the females? One hundred percent of the females would be useless and not contribute to the continuation of the species. If Betas knew the omega carried a female, that meant months of the omega carrying a sex that wouldn’t produce. Logically, since Betas cared so much about continuing the species, they would terminate the females and have the omega go into heat again to produce a male, increasing the odds that the male would be an Alpha or omega. I absolutely don’t understand what the purpose was to include females in this species and why Betas didn’t logically do something to prevent females, either at conception or slightly after. With all their technology and medicines, you’d think they’d have found a way to alter an omegas system to produce more males. The addition of female Betas in this story doesn’t make sense. There was no explanation as to why they existed. If anything, I would think a neutral gender would work better. One that was neither male nor female. So, the addition of females in this world is highly questionable, especially without any indication of why they existed if they never contributed to the continuation of the species.

In the end, I had a lot of issues with this book. The info-dump at the beginning, the overwhelming monologue and the illogical addition of females that served no purpose to the reproduction of the species. However, there are some hints of ideas that sound intriguing, and I wonder if the author intends to do anything with those ideas. Like the questions Kaydi had to answer about if he’d ever come in contact with certain groups. What are those groups? Will any of the Alphas and omegas run away to join them? Is there anyone inside the complex, say a Beta who might be working to help them? Why was that one guard nicer to Moon than the other guards? How did that one Alpha manage to kill himself? Of course, it was clever to introduce the other Alphas at the beginning of the story because it looks like the other books in the series will deal with the other Alphas getting omegas. The idea for these stories is interesting, but at the same time, I would hope there’s more action than just ‘getting to know you’ with sex scenes else the series would just be repetitive. I might read the next book to see if it’s any better or different than this one and if it answers any questions or just leaves them unanswered. As it is I can only give, Moon, 3 Stars.



I received an ARC of this book from the author. I am giving my honest and unbiased opinion. ( )