Steelwhisper Steelwhisper

A very short read, this story appeared to be about two lovers and one of them is telling the other about a violent incident that happened in his past at school.

I couldn't get into the story. One because it was too short, the other because of the way it was divided up into three sections. It's not the three sections that bothered me, it was the way the middle section was written. I couldn't 'feel' anything. It was like reading 'just the facts, madam, just the facts.' And the style of writing in the middle part was very different from the first and last, which disrupted the flow of the story.

Thanks to the writer for participating in the LiAW event though. She did write a story, while most of us are just reading and critiquing.… (mehr)