Eryn Hawk

Started on a lovely strong note and then floated into an okay story of the HEA type. Sigh. Character development, world-building and storyline were all pretty basic but could have been so much stronger. It sounded really great at the start, but just kind of drifted through the rest.
I did find the misuse of words annoying as they stopped my reading process. One that drove me bats was they used the word ' indulgent' ( (p. 212). Kindle Edition). "I smiled at him and took an indulgent gulp of wine." They have used the word as an adverb for the verb gulp - what the heck? More appropriate would have been to write something like "I indulged in a large gulp of wine." Okay - lesson over.
This author has potential but needs an inner circle that will be honest and who understands that words have power and part of that power is the connotations words have.… (mehr)

So much to say and limited space. The essentials: Teighan is a good story, but not a great story.
A couple of warnings - if improper word usage drives you nuts, avoid this author. They also, do not think about triggers as this story needs to come with a trigger warning - humiliation is a kink and there is no shaming here, but it is also a trigger. It would have been nice to have a heads-up before I was triggered.
On the plus side -maybe - there is a ton of internal dialog, but I enjoy that as long as it is not circular. It can add a lot to the depth of the characters. Characters are decently developed while the world-building is basic but there is enough so that the reader does not founder. The storyline was solid, but not developed properly and comes with weird inserts. Really, there could have been a lot more tension built with Alex's mom or Teighan's father - but that was just left to hang.
As for the weird insert (now, I am going to do this in a way that will not be a spoiler, but once you hit that part of the story you will recognize it) Okay - Mathew - did not see him coming BUT - I am not sure why he was there. Just a weird waste of words. Even the author knew this as he had Alex state "What’s a kidnapping without the draaama? A waste of everyone’s time, that’s what.” Why? There was no point.
As for improper use of words - sheesh I have to say this -- blame the English teacher in me. Eryn Hawk -- You destroyed the imagery you were going for when you wrote, "three fingers now thrusting glacially in and out of his body." The connotations associated with glacially are cold, frozen, and grindingly slow. The phrase just does not build the image I imagine you wanted of scorching heat and a slow, deliberate motion.
So - much like the Cairn, a good story, but not great.… (mehr)